In the style of Alice Notley.
What are you in love with? What. Not
who. Who implies a face, a name, a some
body. What. What turned that lump of flesh
into a beating heart?
It can't be a mantra of "because I told you so's" & norms & have to's.
It must be an endless list
of want to's & need to's & the slightest of inflections &
feelings beyond what can be encompassed in a he/she/it/they/them
Or even us.
That is the meaning of the "what".
It surpasses the who's & how's.
It is the what.
It is the dichotomy of never understanding why,
but knowing that it's right all the same.
What are you in love with? What. Not
who. Who implies a face, a name, a some
body. What. What turned that lump of flesh
into a beating heart?
It can't be a mantra of "because I told you so's" & norms & have to's.
It must be an endless list
of want to's & need to's & the slightest of inflections &
feelings beyond what can be encompassed in a he/she/it/they/them
Or even us.
That is the meaning of the "what".
It surpasses the who's & how's.
It is the what.
It is the dichotomy of never understanding why,
but knowing that it's right all the same.
I really like how this poem makes you reevaluate your emotions. It's not really enough to stop at "who", there's something else behind that. I think the line breaks are very interestingly placed. It made me pace myself more when reading rather than reading each line as a sentence. It gives a slight feeling of quick breaths but more than that it makes me comprehend the message better.
ReplyDeleteI absolutely adore this poem. We briefly mentioned this in class, but the "unapologetic" tone of the piece, coupled with the intentional ambiguity injected into the speaker's tone, make for a captivating read! You did a really good job of capturing and expressing the imperfection and sense of confusion/ "amorphousness" that often accompany falling in love. Personally, I wouldn't change much, as I thought you've done a wonderful job with this piece. My only recommendation is to change how you've divided the first and second lines (to make the piece start off more smoothly):
ReplyDelete"What are you in love with? What. Not who.
Who implies a face, a name, a some body"
I'm delighted to note that this poem has now been published on our class website, 215Lexicon!
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